my poem

2004-09-14 · 7144 阅读

who will be
who will be the one sitting beside me in this cozy sofa
who will pat my shoulder when i am down
who will love my dog like i do
who will listen quietly as i sing
who will say I Love You with all his heart
even i don't know who will he be 
let me say Thank You~~

[此贴子已经被作者于2004-9-23 22:30:56编辑过]

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雅思/托福

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arashi LV5

发表于 14-9-2004 21:36:36 | 显示全部楼层

seems good[em04]

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hello_babe LV7

发表于 14-9-2004 22:12:23 | 显示全部楼层

thanks lah...

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猫猫抱抱我 LV8

发表于 14-9-2004 22:38:20 | 显示全部楼层

sounds well! can you tell me what you want to state?

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hello_babe LV7

发表于 14-9-2004 21:09:40 | 显示全部楼层

kind of lousy..forget it..

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hello_babe LV7

发表于 15-9-2004 02:39:45 | 显示全部楼层

you cannot understand? for God's sake!

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猫猫抱抱我 LV8

发表于 15-9-2004 04:12:20 | 显示全部楼层

you are searching for the so called " who" that is in your poem?

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hello_babe LV7

发表于 15-9-2004 05:06:27 | 显示全部楼层

I am not searching but waiting fo him. Even when he has not turned up yet, still wanna say thank you to what he is gonna to do for me in the future~~[em04]

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猫猫抱抱我 LV8

发表于 15-9-2004 06:12:21 | 显示全部楼层

god...wish you can fulfill la..turn back to your poem,,if every paragraph is rhyming, i think it is much better.

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hello_babe LV7

发表于 15-9-2004 22:30:02 | 显示全部楼层

<DIV class=quote>以下是引用猫猫抱抱我在2004-9-15 6:12:21的发言：

god...wish you can fulfill la..
turn back to your poem,,if every paragraph is rhyming, i think it is much better.</DIV>
oh come on. I am not able to achieve that[em09]