my poem

hello_babe · 发表于 14-9-2004 21:02:32|来自：新加坡

who will be
who will be the one sitting beside me in this cozy sofa
who will pat my shoulder when i am down
who will love my dog like i do
who will listen quietly as i sing
who will say I Love You with all his heart
even i don't know who will he be 
let me say Thank You~~

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arashi · 发表于 14-9-2004 21:36:36|来自：新加坡

seems good[em04]

hello_babe · 发表于 14-9-2004 22:12:23|来自：新加坡

thanks lah...

猫猫抱抱我 · 发表于 14-9-2004 22:38:20|来自：新加坡

sounds well! can you tell me what you want to state?

hello_babe · 发表于 14-9-2004 21:09:40|来自：新加坡

kind of lousy..forget it..

hello_babe · 发表于 15-9-2004 02:39:45|来自：新加坡

you cannot understand? for God's sake!

猫猫抱抱我 · 发表于 15-9-2004 04:12:20|来自：新加坡

you are searching for the so called " who" that is in your poem?

hello_babe · 发表于 15-9-2004 05:06:27|来自：新加坡

I am not searching but waiting fo him. Even when he has not turned up yet, still wanna say thank you to what he is gonna to do for me in the future~~[em04]

猫猫抱抱我 · 发表于 15-9-2004 06:12:21|来自：新加坡

god...wish you can fulfill la..turn back to your poem,,if every paragraph is rhyming, i think it is much better.

hello_babe · 发表于 15-9-2004 22:30:02|来自：新加坡

<DIV class=quote>以下是引用猫猫抱抱我在2004-9-15 6:12:21的发言：

god...wish you can fulfill la..
turn back to your poem,,if every paragraph is rhyming, i think it is much better.</DIV>
oh come on. I am not able to achieve that[em09]

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